thanks for the inputs guys.
about the shortcomings, this piece was written in one go, on a notepad and about 6 hours to the deadline. but i think kevin have a good point, there's still too much 'fat' in the first three paragraphs - paragraphs 2 and 3 should've been shroter and merged with the first.
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